Yayz, fluff in moderation! I find that KaKou stories are often sickly sweet, not to mention wildly illogical, but this is a pleasant little sniff of a world in which Kagome discovers happiness with her wolfboy. ^.^
I like the fact that Kagome did not stomp off in a huff, run into Kouga and abruptly realize her true feelings for him because she's pissed off at Inuyasha. @_@ There's something so childish about that concept -- it brings down most of the stories that try to use it.
The paragraph describing Kagome's trip to the stream bothered me a little. It seemed stilted somehow, breaking away from the more sophisicated prose that preceeds it. And the word "sensual" in walked into the cool waters with a sensual shudder seems irrelevant; there's no one to see her, so the motion shouldn't really be sexy. Plus, because "sensual" is used a few times in this fiicy, it ends up sounding sort of repetitive.
I love. This is a wonderful romance story, not overly-sweet, not entirely happy -- after all, we're kind of left hanging at the end, wondering if Inuyasha will find out and ruin everything. @_@
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Date: 2005-03-24 03:06 pm (UTC)I like the fact that Kagome did not stomp off in a huff, run into Kouga and abruptly realize her true feelings for him because she's pissed off at Inuyasha. @_@ There's something so childish about that concept -- it brings down most of the stories that try to use it.
The paragraph describing Kagome's trip to the stream bothered me a little. It seemed stilted somehow, breaking away from the more sophisicated prose that preceeds it. And the word "sensual" in walked into the cool waters with a sensual shudder seems irrelevant; there's no one to see her, so the motion shouldn't really be sexy. Plus, because "sensual" is used a few times in this fiicy, it ends up sounding sort of repetitive.
I love. This is a wonderful romance story, not overly-sweet, not entirely happy -- after all, we're kind of left hanging at the end, wondering if Inuyasha will find out and ruin everything. @_@
Lovely piece. I really enjoyed reading. ^_^